Stand Up Writing Class TWO: TAGGING A STORY.

I hope you had a great Thanks Giving and that you’re jornaling three pages a day about your set, joke writing and perspective, rehearsing, and working on your joke mechanics and making sure the punch word is AT the end of the punch line. Alright, great first class and second class!!!! For your homework next Monday October 15, have a FIVE TO SEVEN Minute set ready: a personal story with FIVE JOKES. If you can, make a few of these jokes from a different perspective.  RELAX, HAVE FUN! (REMEMBER, our energy on stage is what delivers our material. When you’re having fun so is the audience. If you’re afraid, so are they. Also: write jokes about your fears and share them in your set.  What ever you bring to class we can build off. These are the steps for your SECOND CLASS homework 🙂

We’re going to take a moment from your life and write some material for it. This is called, TAGGING. ( TAGGING: taking material from a story and amplifying it or writing jokes about the story.) When we take an idea and expand off of it, the stand up term is called TAGGING. Tagging is the same as building off or expanding.

Tagging and using it in on a memory or story from your life is different than lets say, writing jokes about the news: ( this genre is called TOPICAL MATERIAL. If you’re tagging the news, we learn about your opinions but don’t really learn about you. Real moments from your life solve this. Also, if you’re going to talk about religion or the news, you’re going to miss your business model, unless this is your business model.) If I play with a news story like a robotic lawn mower, I can QUESTION and Answer the PREMISE within the CIRCLE from different perspectives and come up with a joke like: “You can now buy a Robot Lawn Mower. How much does it cost? If you’re too lazy to get off the couch you can own a Lawn Robot for the low low price of, DIABETES!”

Now, if I have a story about lawn and yard work I can drop this joke into my set but what I’m asking is: 1) Locate a moment that really reveals you, a lawn story that you’re embarrassed or unsure you should to tell us. 2) Q and A EACH SENTENCE OF THE STORY and ask yourself what the vulnerable point is (punch line) and ask what we feel about the point-(premise) INSERT THE JOKE AFTER EACH SENTENCE. (you’re tagging each sentence. 3) Tape your story with it’s tags and rehearse it for Monday’s class.

EXAMPLE: I was in a Canadian Tire last January to drop off my fuel pump to get a new one, (TAG, I will have the punch line at the end of this information.) My wife must have thought I was going to Victoria’s secret because she said I could do my Christmas shopping 360 days early. Well, there wasn’t any lingerie but I still haven’t told my wife about the work bench I bought, so technically, it is a secret.  I thought of her and bought one of those rings you can slip through 18 plastic bags to make my wife’s grocery experience more pleasurable. For a year I told her I bought her a giant ring. I also got her an Edmonton Oilers steering wheel cover. Every time she grabbed her steering wheel, the cover screamed, began crying and demanded to be traded.  (TAG) I also got her a talking Christmas card that played The 12 days of Christmas; well it would of if the battery wasn’t almost dead 11 months later. When she opened it, the 1st day of Christmas played so slow, it sounded like Celine Dion on Demerol. Anyway, I do my shopping and drop my fuel pump off at the automotive department. I asked him if he had a new one. He says yes but asked me why I brought in my alternator.        I’ll tag this story for class. Please do the same. with your story. ( 5 to 7 minute story and five jokes inserted into your story.

REMEMBER: look at a sentence in your story: 1) Ask what the point is, look for more than one: the elephant in the room, the thing you don’t want to admit, from another perspective. This is the PUNCHLINE. Look at the PUNCH WORD, change it, try others.  2) How do you FEEL about the PUNCHLINE? Again, the deeper you look the better the PREMISE. have fun kids!!!

We’ll be playing with MISDIRECTION and FORESHADOWING  in the next class, CLASS 3

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Class I: September 24 Stand Up Writing

Thank you everyone for being in my class. It’s a big deal to me that you’re in my class. Thank you again all of you for being in Stand Up Writing!!! The first class was great. All of you shared your talent and creativity and were open to the lessons I was sharing: We talked about the basic structure of a joke: premise, punchline, punch word: example: PREMISE: I have a crappy car. I have an airbag. Punchline: But I have to blow it up myself. Punch Word: blow. ( REMEMBER: The more honesty in the premise, the funnier the punchline.)

BTW: Please remember to use the smaller note pad for your material and your set. Use the thicker note pad to JOURNAL 3 pages a day about jokes you’re working on, your set, the class but keep your journalling specific to the class. Use it as a vehicle to rehearse and sharpen your creative saw.

  1. Remember: Premise, punchline, punch word. Look at your premise and ask what is it I’m trying to say or afraid to say, the secret, the unspoken, the Elephant in the room. This unspoken/ over the top sarcasm is the punchline. The less emotion the more neutral or vanilla the joke is. When we use MISDIRECTION and add three amplifiers to the premise; the attention is taken away from the punchline by making extra reference to the premise.
  2. EXAMPLE: Be honest, most guys aren’t handy. (what’s the elephant in the room here? Guys are supposed to be MR tool man. So I add amplifiers to the premise and have:) “If we’re honest, most men aren’t handy. They’re immature, have low self esteem, and have boundary issues. His ex is thinking, if he can’t commit to a relationship, how the hell’s he going to commit to fixing a sink?”
  3. It’s a great exercise to write jokes from different perspectives. It’s also great to write jokes about what you know. Writing jokes fro a story from our life is amplifying our story, embellishing it. I call this framing.
  4. Take a 3 or 4 minute story from your life and ask and answer questions from a few different perspectives and answer the premise with as honest an answer that you can. This is the punch line.
  5. Put your premise in the circle and make the cross and insert 4 perspectives on 4 corners of the cross. Ask and answer questions from each perspective.
  6. Journal three pages each day on your material, story, Q and A’s premises and punchlines. If you journal around the questions and ideas of your set you will reap the benefits!
  7. HOMEWORK: Choose a 3 or 4 minute story from your life, a story that you think tells us who you are. REMEMBER, the more honest you are and using the elephant in the room about your life the better your set will be. HOMEWORK: 3 to 4 minute story with five jokes in it.
  8. if you have any challenges, E MAIL PLEASE 🙂

On our anniversary, what I’ve learned from my wife Nernie.

The only way we can truly know someone is by giving of and being ourselves. My wife Nernie is the one single reason I’m on that journey. I know this sounds confusing. Let me explain please and also while I am explaining, not making this blog about me but about the amazing lady… who changed my life.

I met Nernie in a gym a long time ago. It was her beauty that got my attention but then her energy. She radiated this aura that pulled me toward her like a tractor beam. Of course my dysfunctional nature repelled her away. This is the part where I have to make this a little about me, it’s called back story. I have always been a way too sensitive, lonely insecure selfish desperate person trapped in scarcity. I’ve protected myself in this place and in my first meeting with Nernie she was a victim of it. I was anybody but myself when I met her, macho, loud, abrasive. I remember saying to her in my low goomba voice: “hey, the stepper you work out on is broken and um, yeah I wanted to tell you that and um, hey it’s leg day maybe you could give me a spot? ” I just remember thinking why am I being a jock, talk to her like I’m real, which was something I was incapable of.

Nernie exudes this healing energy, an empathy and compassion that kept pulling me closer to her. She was reading the same spiritual books I was reading when I met her and I had been on this metaphysical quest when we first met; I was on year 2 of a 4 year experience reading ‘A Course In Miracles.’ I was in this head space when I thought I knew what I was doing creatively and personally. I couldn’t have been more wrong. (years later we were watching an episode of Will and Grace and they did a joke about a Course in Miracles. Nernie laughed so hard she feel off the couch!)

Nernie is first and foremost beautiful but I mean inside as well also. She’s a person of action, her kind deeds to strangers, friends and any and all doggies, kitties, birds and bunnies is a never ending clinic on compassion. She’s just being who she is, herself.

This is where my challenge has always been. Here’s this incredible woman who has shown me every moment I’ve known her how to treat others and how to attract the life we dream, ‘GIVE.’ Yeah, really? Try live in a dysfunctional family of 8 and learn anything about giving. It’s not an excuse or maybe  it is. Dysfunction has taught me the freedom of blaming anything and everything on everyone else and not taking responsibility for anything. “Hey, why did you run naked through Walmart? I was raised in dysfunction. I take responsibility for nothing I do.”

Let me say, being insecure and terrified that I’ll never amount to anything has ingrained this bottomless scarcity in me, this infinite notion that I’ll never be or have enough and it’s really hard to wake from this habit. Nernie taught me that kindness to others and to myself was the place to start.  Since I met my wife over fifteen years ago we have bought a house, I’ve published a novel, recorded an hour comedy special on CTV and won a national award for teaching Stand Up.

I share these things not because I did them but because Nernie loved me enough to make me believe I could. Her love, kindness and heart melted my fears. She has taught me to feed the life we dream from my heart and to never quit.

We’ve been through a lot in the years we’ve been together, a lot of it heart breaking, the loss of her parents, my dad, changes in career. It was in these dark moments I really saw my wife’s strength, her undying faith in giving to those around her while her heart was breaking. She helps everyone around her first before she considers herself.

And now I realize how quickly life seeps past, days, weeks, months and years slip by like seconds until our last breath.  I will fight to create the life Nernie and I dream and use every ounce of my being to make that happen. I have more novels, classes and personal breakthroughs to reach with my spirit far beyond what my ego is screaming what I am.

Nernie had a dream a long time ago where I was pulling a rope out of me while I was on stage. I’ve made a lot of mistakes in my life and all of them because I thought from scarcity and only of myself. Nernie has often told me she wasn’t sure what her purpose was and why she was here. I’m not my wife’s purpose but who I am are the results of her. Everything I am is a result of her love, tenderness and fire within.

Your purpose is to be exactly who you are right now my wife and nothing else. You have made an incredible difference in so many lives especially in the one of this reclamation. You saw so many years ago the man that I’m becoming through the woman you are. The rope I’m pulling out of me was always in your hands. Your’re the one pulling me from me closer to you. It was never about me. It was about that second so many years ago, a lost broken man had the incredible fortune of meeting his mirror, his love of his life you my wife… my soulmate.

Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don’t matter and those who matter. . . don’t mind.

Pauly loves Nernie, always.


Out Line for class 5 set.

IN THIS BLOG: Club set; Opening joke, 2nd best joke, Closing joke,best joke, running gag, a series of 3 references too one idea,  callbacks, a joke that connects back to a previous joke, and our Frame, the story we insert all these ingredients. I want to thank all of you for being in my Stand Up Writing class again. I absolutely give everything to each and every class I have. I hope you enjoyed my class because I sure enjoyed sharing it. REMEMBER: Your stand up performance is Tuesday June 5th. The doors open at 6:30. Show time is 7:30

Alright here’s the outline for your work/set- for Monday. 1) Look at your set/frame and MAKE SURE YOUR OPENING JOKE IS YOUR SECOND BEST JOKE IN YOUR SET!!! ( If you have a better joke in your set that’s not your closing joke, put that in your opening)

Here’s my set I’m working on and how I tagged it ( worked on each sentence from different perspectives and arrived at my material.) REMEMBER, YOUR FRAME/SET should have your theme, what you want an audience to know about you.

My FRAME/SET is about me falling off the back of my brother’s van when I was 17. I’ve written the story out the way it happened. Here’s the outline.

1) I used to get this line from my dad when I was a juvenile. “Hey idiot. If you’re going to drink, drink at home; you won’t get in trouble, you’ll be safe and I’ll know where you are.” ‘Really,’ I’d think, and maybe after a couple of beers I’ll have the confidence to hit on mom. 2) My smart older brother eventually took me to his drinking spot, a cemetery. He said, “I only go to one graveyard. It’s not as if I’m scouring the obituaries looking for house parties. 3) “Besides,” he said, “if it  makes any difference I tried to get into a cemetery on the west end but it’s always packed.” I  listened to my older brother because he was like this weird sage that questioned everything . Someone would say, “why are you drinking in a cemetery a cemetery’s for the dead.” and he’d say, “yes, but are the dead for the cemetery?” WHAT? (I’ll use this two more times) 4)My brother some of his friends and I hopped into my brother’s crap van and drove to the cemetery. My brother knew nothing about cars. Once he spent hours taking out the fuel pump and dropped it on the service desk at Canadian Tire and said, “I need a new fuel pump.” The guy behind the desk said,”alright, so why did you bring your air-circulator?” My brother said, no, why did my air circulator bring me?” What?  (I’ve used the gag twice so I’ll use it another time and as I rehearse I’ll refine the quotes) I’m ending my set on after my brother brings me home from the hospital after I fell off the back of the van and my dad said, ” so I see you brought home the idiot”, so I’ll have a call back a reference to a single joke. but you see the work that goes into this, rehearse, re write and do it again.

REMEMBER: Put each sentence in a circle and tag/write a joke from 3 or 4 different perspectives, let the first joke be sarcasm and then use amplifiers and turn them into mis direction. Make sure you look for the elephant in the room for each joke and YOU’RE NOT LOOKING FOR THE PUNCHLINE YOU’RE LOOKING FOR YOU!!!

Class 4.We’re not just looking for the Punch Line.

REMEMBER: Our class grad is TUESDAY JUNE 5th, the doors open at 6:30 showtime is 7:30. Tickets are 10$ at the door. I have 2 guest spots fellow alumni, Sabrina Sperber and Donna Erickson. Hello gentlemen, I’ve had a little challenge with my web site but have it sorted out and here’s some things to add to the last class. We’re going to have our set ready for next Monday May 28: MAKE SURE YOUR SET IS LESS THAN “10” MINUTES. Make sure you have an opening joke a great closing and at least five jokes in between. REMEMBER: A JOKE MAKES A POINT. Also, 1) The ‘SHOW’ of your set is: rehearsing, being creative, your energy, and emotions associated with your set, journal-ling about your set, siting down and working on your set. BUSINESS: being prepared, knowing your material, writing jokes for the audience, listening to class mates, realizing the Stand Up Comedy isn’t just about us, it’s also about the audience and club staff, agents, opportunity and delivering.

Our set. Know your story, the beginning middle and end. At the very least have an idea what you want the audience to know about you and make sure you state that if you want in your OPENING JOKE: “Hi, I’m. . .and (your theme) I don’t know what I’m doing, I’m from the sixties, I’m from a big family, I think I peaked in high school. . . ( either state your theme off the top, say it/ or write a joke about it.

1) Choose a story and ask what you’re avoiding or afraid to say about each sentence ( this will be the PUNCH LINE the PREMISE is the sentence. 2) When you add the THREE amplifiers you have MISDIRECTION. Here’s an example.

My set for next class is about being a teenager. ( I literally don’t know how I survived being a teen.) I look at my story and work on the first sentence and ask myself how I really feel because, ” WE’RE NOT LOOKING FOR A PUNCH LINE WE’RE LOOKING FOR OURSELVES; for us, for the pattern and things that make us unique. Our truth.”

I can’t believe I survived my teen years. (This is a joke I’m working on, I’m asking the most honest, the elephant in the room, my truth about being a teenager. The more honest and over the top truth is the punch line.) What do I feel about my teen years? I was a train wreck, I shouldn’t be alive, I never listened to anyone, I knew everything. I like this last one, I feel it. Here’s my first joke

“I can’t believe I survived being a teen, hey I was a teenager I knew everything.”  ( This is a good opening joke for me from MY PERSPECTIVE. We need to take the time to EXPLORE other points of view in our set because in these perspectives we have more EMOTIONS and ANSWERS and TRUTH and these REVEAL who we are and are ingredients in our STORY. My first joke is SARCASM and if I add the AMPLIFIERS I have MIS- DIRECTION. “I can’t believe I survived being a teen, I ignored my parents, teachers, my future;   ignored my parents, teachers, my future; hey, I was a teenager, I knew everything.”

Try these writing exercises for next class: write five jokes from other perspectives and five jokes from your theme. ( If you don’t know what your theme is , use the one in your story, find THE POINT of your story and let that be your theme.

Have fun with this, E mail me if your stuck. Have a punch line for each major point in your set. Write at least five new jokes for next class and when I say “THIRTY SECONDS,” you have 30 seconds to wrap up your set.

Class three, misdirection.

Remember gentlemen, our comedy Grad is Tuesday June 5th. Showtime is 7:30. Doors are open at 6:30. Start inviting your friends and family and co workers now. Tickets are 10$ and funds from the door will be donated to the Edmonton Garrison family resource center. It was a great class on Monday gentlemen! Thank you again for being a part of my Stand Up Writing Class. It’s my honor to be be a part of this group. Remember, ( your set is a story, YOUR STORY. All the material we’re developing in this class is predicated on the story about your life that you choose.) Also allow your energy in class to be big, positive!!!  Remember, I’m also a nationally touring comedian, if you want to bring me to your event, retreat, Christmas party e mail me at  I’m also a published author, ask me about my first novel. I’d really appreciate it if you share this. Thank you.

HOMEWORK FOR CLASS THREE: Go through the stories of your life that really share YOUR THEME. Choose one of these stories you’d like to perform on your Stand Up Performance on Tuesday June 5th and insert THREE TO FIVE MISDIRECTION JOKES. Here is the formula for misdirection; REMEMBER to use your THREE PAGES IN YOUR JOURNAL to work on your set for class on Monday.

1)Choose a STORY/FRAME that broadcasts your THEME.

2) look at the FIRST, SECOND and MIDDLE SENTENCE IN YOUR STORY AND THE LAST SENTENCE TO Q and A and then develop with MISDIRECTION. (Say the sentence out loud, ask how you really feel about the sentence, the deep emotion, say it out loud. This comment is the PUNCHLINE. Then, think of THREE statements that are connected to the sentence, things that are at the heart of the sentence. Write them out and then say the sentence/  premise, the three comments and the punchline. Keep revising until you’re comfortable with the chunk.                                          Alright, lets get down to MISDIRECTION. First we look at our story: I’m choosing “being messy,”  and when I share this I’m revealing who I am and that’s what good stories and jokes do. Look at your first sentence and Q and A it!  My first sentence is: I wasn’t sure if I should tell my wife I was a slob when I met her. QUESTION: “Why wouldn’t I tell her? ANSWER:  I already had enough against me. Telling her I was messy might have been too much to bare.  So we have a the Q and A for the first sentence of my set. (REMEMBER the POOL  at the bottom of your STAND UP writing page that we make? I wrote down at the bottom of the page that there should be a personal bottom line of wants that have to be met in a relationship before it can move forward a personal wish list that has to me met, five, ten, fifty years later. I find this interesting and will use it for another joke. Get in the habit of also doing that.


EXAMPLE: I didn’t tell my wife I was messy when I met her, I was angry, broke and drunk. Telling her I was messy would have been too much to bare.


First look at a sentence in your story. 1) I decided to clean my car one handful of garbage at a time. 2) What’s something that would be sarcastic? (it would take a million years, I’d be a hundred when I finish? Where I decided to start? YES. Here’s the joke.

“I decided to clean my car one handful of garbage at a time, it was crammed with paper, cups and newspapers. I decided to start next year.

Keep setting up the premise and then adding three comments that are different than the punch line. The comments create the misdirection.

E mail me if you have any questions. Have fun and allow yourself to reveal you in your material and make sure your punch lines make a point. 1) Premise. 2) three comments. 3) unexpected punch line. Keep playing with this, the more emotion the bigger the laugh. And remember to journal about your SET, WRITING JOKES. EMOTION and everything you feel about your set.

Monday April 30th class blog

First, thank you everyone for being in my Stand Up Writing Class. For everyone to get the most from this class, find a story that reveals you, tells an audience who you are and a story that makes you laugh. For class 2 have:( a four or five minute story from your life that holds your theme and has at least 3 to 5 jokes you’ve written this week.) Remember: a great joke is the answer to a good question. We’re going to simply ASK and ANSWER the questions from each sentence in the story we choose. Journal three pages a day on the story. Ask questions about the people in your story, the place, the feelings. (When you’re journaling this week, ask and answer questions about your story, the punchlines will come.

REMEMBER: The premise holds a KEY WORD so does the PUNCHLINE. Ask questions about these words. Can they be replaced? Do the other people in your story have the same word choices as you? Give them their own voice.

EXAMPLE: MY THEME: ‘I don’t know what I’m doing but I’m doing it anyway.’ The story I’ve chosen that amplifies my MARKET BRAND: I’m a slob. (We’re going to Q and A each sentence with FIVE questions and answers and chose the one we like the best and simply put it into our story at the beginning of each sentence. This is the same as embellishing a story except BECAUSE WE’RE WRITING JOKES IN A STORY THAT CARRIES OUR THEME WE’RE THEN AMPLIFYING OUR THEME.

MY STORY. 1) Why does my wife think I’m a slob? Because my car is crammed with garbage.  She said there’s no space in my car. ( What she’s really saying is there needs to be more space for her stuff!) If my car was crammed with her stuff, would she still be calling me a hoarder. No, I’d be her man savant, or servant or what ever she calls me. What is the point here? That I’m running out of space. What does that remind me of? Running out of options! How do I use this in a PUNCH LINE? How do I make this a joke that reveals me? Make me the punchline!

  1. My wife keeps buying stuff, her car is filled with shoes, boxes and clothes. I “implied,” she might be a hoarder because her car was crammed with stuff. “Great, you’re buying me a bigger car.” (I would use this to start my story/set about cleaning my car out one handful of garbage at a time.
  2. My story happens in TD Bank. What does TD stand for? I asked a bunch of questions and came up with this joke.
  3. “All the money in my account disappeared, service charges, bank fees and transactions. I wondered what TD meant, turns out it’s “TU DU!”
  4. Remember: Look at your premise and ask what the secret is , the unspoken, the Elephant in the room. This unspoken idea is the punchline. What we ask of the punchline is the PREMISE.
  6. EXAMPLE: QUESTION, Why am I such a slob? ANSWER: My parents live on in my garbage.
  7. (We’ll be discussing this more next class) Put your premise in the circle and make the cross and insert 4 perspectives on 4 corners of the cross. Ask and answer questions from each perspective.
  8. Journal three pages each day on your material, story, Q and A’s premises and punchlines. If you journal around the questions and ideas of your set you will reap the benefits.
  9. HOMEWORK: Choose a 4 to 5 minute story from your life that holds your THEME/ MARKET BRAND , a story that reveals you and ask and answer 3 to 5 questions on each sentence.
  10. Have fun. If you’re stuck ASK and ANSWER questions about being stuck and ask from different perspectives, from your critic, from who you were when you were 10, from your pet 🙂 If you have any questions E mail me at:

“One Thing.” How to get the most out of your set on Monday the 12th.

Sorry it’s taken extra time to get this blog up kids. I also ask everyone to please share me class and my website with everyone thank you in advance if you have already. My next class begins Monday April 30th in Yuks Comedy Club in Century Casino. Share my E mail with anyone who’s interested and I will answer all questions, my class info, hiring me as a Key Note and Corporate Comedian. Big breath, thank you again.

Alright, your set: In every part of your set there’s ONE THING you can do to achieve the results that you desire.                                                                               1) Tape your set and listen to it. Have a note pad ready and listen to your set, ask this: are you pausing after each joke? Does your set contain your theme, the market brand the thing that tell us who you really are? (We’re not looking for quantity, ten minutes, we’re looking for quality, the one thing that makes you, YOU: honesty)

2) Does your set START with your SECOND BEST JOKE and End with your BEST JOKE? Look at your set and talk it out. Remember when you’re telling your set you’re reliving a story you LIVED! Give the people in your set their own voice, actions and let go and be yourself.

3) Does your set close on your BEST JOKE. Your story/set should gradually get funnier, the points/punch lines in your set should grow to your best joke, your last joke.

4) Look at your set/story and make sure every joke MAKES A POINT.

5) Journal your set each day before Monday and while you are, look at your jokes from other perspectives, from other people in the story; dad, mom, a sibling-to the dog cat or something inanimate like the couch or bag of chips you just ate.

7) Your energy , what you feel is what’s being shared with the audience, not only the material. If you’re nervous, excited, passionate or grateful because you took PAUL SVEEN’S comedy class to help you with your genius comedy; whatever you’re feeling is the fuel behind your performance. So be happy have fun. And if you’re scared: TELL THEM. Be honest with an audience and they’ll love you for it.

8) Be prepared: don’t bring a notepad on stage. Know your material; rehearse it and have your set on your phone, listen to it over and over always finding ways to add emotion to the joke. Dress nice, clean clothes and feeling good. Don’t drink or smoke pot before a show. After, shoot heroin in your eye if you like but for your performance: rehearse, rehearse rehearse-repeat.

REMEMBER: there’s ONE THING you can do in each segment of your set, look at each part of your set that I’ve described above and ask yourself, what’s the one thing I can do now to have a better set for Monday.


Have fun and I’ll see you at 6:30 on Monday March 12 at Yuk Yuks in Century Casino on Fort Road.

CLASS 2Foreshadowing,

Thank you everyone for the great class on Monday. I really appreciate your hard work. I would also really appreciate if you spread the word of my class and my website. If you know an organization or company that’s looking for a speaker or comedian for their event, please share my link to my website  or my E mail please.                                                                                                                                    THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!

  1. Remember : our story our set, write out and Tag each sentence in your story. Re tag the set/story from as many perspectives on the circle as you can: looking from your perspective as well as the others in your story. But start by writing out your STORY/SET and look at each sentence and look at the sentence, ask what the sentence is saying (THIS IS YOUR PREMISE) Ask what you feel about the premise (THIS IS THE PUNCHLINE)
  2. REMEMBER: Journal through your homework this will help you go through ideas and remember to have a POOL a place at the bottom of your page where you insert ideas that bubble up while you’re working on your STORY/SET; These ideas might become valuable later.
  3. When we foreshadow our set we set the next joke up in the set. This gives our set rhythm and escalates theme
  4. I’m going to play with the set I’m playing with: “My spouse doesn’t like me being in a comedy class.”
  5. REMEMBER : Story is the boss. I’m taking a story from my past where over five years a comedian’s wife slowly stops going to his shows.I don’t care if you’re married to Chris Angel or Wayne Gretzky, be honest, look in your heart, after a while Janet Gretzky must have been like:             “great, another hat trick, what’s that, 2000 of them? Great.” yawn.”
    1. Opening joke: (I’m going to keep directing and foreshadowing the jokes toward a comedian’s wife never going to their shows.) WRITE OUT THE PREMISE and then :ask what your sentence is saying and then answer how you feel about it.” look for the emotional unspoken punchline, also, look at the key words in the previous joke and use it to foreshadow the next joke                                                                              I told my wife I was taking a comedy class. She said, take plumbing, renovating, working around the house; that’s the stuff that really makes her laugh ” 2) I talk about her in my shows; , how she doesn’t think I’m funny, doesn’t laugh at my jokes and how she couldn’t stop laughing when I tried to fix the sink.” < I foreshadowed the second joke in the first joke when I said my wife thought I couldn’t be a handy man> 3) My wife came to my last open mike, small audience, quiet, I asked them what they wanted to talk about. My wife shouted out, “tell them about being a handyman!”
  6. Write out the story, write out the point/premise and how you feel/ punchline. Keep talking it out and journal new material.
  7. Have your 4 minute set for next class on Monday February 26.
  8. E  mail me if you have any challenges:
  9. remember to have fun and share my class, website and me as a comedian if you want. 🙂
  10. IMPORTANT: I have an unexpected event on TUESDAY MARCH SIX. WE WILL BE HAVING OUR GRAD PERFORMANCE NIGHT MONDAY MARCH 12 ( I apologize for any confusion, which will never end, by the way 🙂

Class Two Blog. Developing your theme.

Thank you everyone for your heard work in the class. The last class had so much great material and laughter and fantastic ideas shared with each other. Remember though: when other students are on stage, have your note pad ready to write down ideas you can share with them after they’re off the stage. This will help you with perspective and make you a better Stand Up. REMEMBER to JOURNAL, JOURNAL JOURNAL 🙂

ALSO, REMEMBER: we’re raising funds for PTSD if you want to create opportunities to have another comedy night to make a difference with another organization, E mail me

ALRIGHT, THEME and Joke Writing. Here are the steps: 1) choose a story that has your theme/ if you’re stuck on theme, choose a story that really makes you laugh. 2) Ask how you feel about the points of your story, begin with the first sentence and move through the story, asking and answering the sentences. 3)Ask what the emotion is in the point of each sentence and locate words that amplify this emotion. 4) Go through your story and ask and answer, talk out loud 5) Remember to locate as many ideas, movies, songs, memories and people places and things and words that are connected to your story and see if they fit.

EXAMPLE: I’m working with a story that is about driving through a Robbin’s Doughnuts Drive through and asking for Tim Bits.

Do you remember Robbin’s doughnuts? Franchises were hunted down and taken out by your family friendly Tim Hortons. Yes there’s always time for Tim’s since you’ve run everyone else out of the country. (This is how I feel, I want to explore this.)

I asked the question, “Do you remember Robbin’s Doughnuts? (Ask the question and then use sarcasm to answer it.) They were the last place to allow smoking. Here’s my first joke, I found this while doing my journal:                                                                                                                                                             “Do you remember Robbin’s doughnuts? The last coffee shop to allow smoking? What was their sales pitch, if our doughnuts, cake and coffee doesn’t kill you.” (This is my first joke so far. When you’re finished your set, ask yourself if your second best joke is at the beginning of your story; if it isn’t, move that joke to the beginning of your set . Your best joke has to be at the end.

SECOND JOKE: I’m just going through the story the way it happened and asking and answering questions and I’m doing this by asking how I really feel. I went into a Robbin’s doughnuts drive through and asked for Tim bits. The guy in the speaker screams, “we don’t sell TIM BITS!! The guy calms down and says this is Robbin’s Doughnuts. Do you want something else?” I said, “No thank you. I’ll just take the bit I have now and back away.”

THIRD JOKE: What are some of the actual things that happens to me at Tim Horton’s. “They say Tim Horton’s is like being home, yeah, a bunch of people in sweats in a bad mood that don’t want  to talk to each other.”

Forth joke: Every time I get cut off in the drive through at Timmy’s it’s always  by a truck? At least at Starbucks when you get cut off it’s something like a Lexus. and then I think, I could buy one of those if I wasn’t  spending 10$ on a cup of coffee at Starbucks.”

REMEMBER: choose a story. Ask and answer questions about the story. Look at other points of view. Be as sarcastic as you can in the punchline. put these new jokes in your story and tell the story out loud to yourself. Keep asking the point of the sentence and keep feeding the point of your theme.

Have fun!!!